CONTEST: Write a Children's Story!

[Lappy]

Write a Children's Story!

Here’s how to join:

1. Write a simple story for very early readers, so make sure your words can be read at a basic reading level.
   •   Your story can be a SIMPLIFIED ADAPTATION of popular stories, or one that’s COMPLETELY ORIGINAL.
   •   5 to 15 slides per story

2. Plan your storyboard by splitting your story into 1 or 2 sentences per slide.

3. Post a summary of your entry in this thread in the following format:
       Title: The title of your story and your name (you may use a pen name, if you like)
          Slide 1: One or two sentences of your story
              Image:  Describe your illustration or what illustration you mean to have
              Picture Audio: (if any)
          Slide 2:  Another sentence or two from your story
              Image:  Describe your illustration or what illustration you mean to have
              Picture Audio: (if any)

4. You can post as many entries as you like!

Duration:  Contest ends on August 22, 2008

Judging:  KL & I will review the entries on August 22nd. We will announce the winners on August 25, 2008.

[EDIT: As we won't be able to review everything until Monday 25th, you can still submit entries over the weekend!]


Prizes:

The person with the best story will get  5,000 loyalty points, plus we will actually commission a professional artist to illustrate the story and publish it as one of the default categories for Little Reader with credit going to the author!

We will also choose the Top 10 Storytellers and give them 1,000 loyalty points each!

Criteria for Judging:
   •   Originality
   •   Creativity
   •   Suitability and effectiveness for the early reader

Adding Pictures and Audio:
Although the contest doesn’t require this, you can still choose to create your own story categories and playlists, and add your own images, pronunciation and picture audio.  The more people download your story, the more points you earn!

[nhockaday]

so it's not judged with any pictures? you are just judging by the story itself?

[Lappy]

That's right, Nikki.  The contest doesn't require them to be illustrated nor made into categories, but of course you are all free to make them into Little Reader playable files for everyone to enjoy!  This time, we hope everyone will join the contest, seeing as it is much easier to submit an entry. 

Being one of the most creative members of our forum, I look forward to seeing work from you soon!

Cheers everyone, and have fun! 

[anushyam]

Hi Lappy,

I have attached my story as a ppt slide with some illustrations from clipart. Though they are not very consistent, they tell the story! 

Is this what you are looking for? Shall i make it simpler?

Anushyam

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Title:The Mouse and the Lion Adaptation from Aesop’s Fables by AnuShyam

Slide 1: One day, the lion was resting after a full meal.
              Image:  Picture of a lion resting after eating
              Picture Audio: None
         
Slide 2:  A tiny mouse, who did not know that the lion was sleeping, made a lot of noise collecting food. 
                     This woke the angry lion up.
              Image:  Lion angry at waking up and finding a mouse
              Picture Audio: *Roar*

Slide 3:  The mouse pleaded with the lion,
                      "Please don’t be angry sir, Please let me go. I can help you in your time of need."
              Image:  Mouse talking to the lion
              Picture Audio: None

Slide 4:  The lion laughed and mocked,
                      "How can a tiny mouse help a big lion like me? Go on now and don’t disturb me."
              Image:  Lion laughing at mouse
              Picture Audio: *Hahaha*

Slide 5:  A few days later, while the lion was looking around for food, he accidentally stepped into a net trap.
                     The lion roared and fought to be freed.
              Image:  Lion caught in a trap
              Picture Audio: *Roar*

Slide 6:  Upon hearing the lion’s cries, the tiny mouse came to the lion’s help.
                     "Don’t worry sir, I’ve come to help you."
              Image:  Lion caught in a trap, and mouse trying to help
              Picture Audio: None

Slide 7:  "How can a tiny mouse help a big lion like me? Go on now and don’t disturb me." said the lion sadly.
                      The mouse immediately nibbled on the net and in no time, the net fell apart .
              Image:  Sad lion, the mouse chewing on the net
              Picture Audio: None

Slide 8:  "I’m sorry I underestimated you because of your size. Thank you for your help." said the lion.
                     "I’m just returning a good deed you did by releasing me the other day.” said the mouse.
                     They both became the best of friends from that day forward.
              Image:  Freed lion, happy with mouse
              Picture Audio: None

[KL]

Wonderful, Anushyam!! What a great story to get the ball rolling!

My only comment would be that some slides could be made shorter or split into another slide, cos this is aimed for the very early reader. But in any case, I thoroughly enjoyed it!!

Thanks for all your effort!

[koala girl]

Hi, wasn't sure if this was too simple.  I can get all the photos for it though.  I thought that there can be a vocabulary list to work on before reading the story too.  Hope it is close to what your looking for.

Koala girl


Katie the Koala

Slide one:  This is Katie the Koala.
Image: Picture of a koala

Slide two:  Katie lives high up in the trees.
Image:  Koala in the trees.

Slide three: Katie only eats eucalyptus leaves.
Image:  Koala eating leaves.

Slide four:  Katie has two thumbs to help her eat.
Image:  Picture of two opposable thumbs on hand.

Slide five:  She is always tired and likes to sleep.
Image:  Koala sleeping.

Slide six:  Katie has sharp claws to help her climb.
Image: Close up of claws.

Slide seven:  And in her pouch she has a big surprise!
Image:  Joey head looking out of pouch.

[nhockaday]

Oh, that is great! 

[nhockaday]

Why I Love You
by nhockaday
http://forum.brillkids.com/downloads/?sa=view;id=793

Slide one: One night Baby Bear asked Momma Bear why she loved him. Momma Bear gently kissed him and said:
(momma bear tucking baby bear into bed and kissing him)

Slide two: I love you because you are the cutest, most lovable, huggable bear in the whole world.
(baby bear giving momma bear a hug)
 
Slide three: Because every time you smile, my day gets a little brighter,
(baby bear with a big smile)

Slide four: and every time you laugh, my heart bursts with joy.
(baby bear laughing while momma bear tickles him)

Slide five: I love you because no other bear makes silly faces like you do,
(baby bear making silly faces)

Slide six: and no other bear gives sloppy, wet kisses like you do.
(baby bear giving momma bear a big kiss)

Slide seven: I love you because when you're in my arms, nothing else matters,
(momma bear holding baby bear in her arms)

Slide eight: and when I'm away from you, you're all that I think about.
(momma bear thinking about baby bear while sitting at her desk at work)

Slide nine: There are so many reasons why I love you,
(back to the image of momma bear tucking baby bear in [but no kisses this time])

Slide ten: but most of all, I love you because you are all mine.
(baby bear sleeping and momma bear shutting out the light)

[Lappy]

AWW.  That was soooo heartwarming.

Great work everyone!

[anushyam]

Ok maybe my first story was too advanced for little kids to read. So I'm taking KL's advice and embarking on this simple phonetic story from my child's school.  

Title: Ziggy the Zebra Adaptation from a preschool by Anushyam

Slide 1: Ziggy zipped across the road.
Image: Background is the zoo. Foreground is a zebra trying to cross the road

Slide 2: No zipping said the zookeeper.
Image: Zookeeper warning ziggy the zebra

Slide 3: Ziggy zoomed across the road
Image: Background is the zoo. Foreground is a zebra trying to cross the road faster. different cars

Slide 4: No zooming said the zookeeper.
Image: Zookeeper warning ziggy the zebra

Slide 5: Ziggy zig zagged across the road
Image: Ziggy zigzagging on the road

Slide 6: No zigzagging said the zookeeper.
Image: Zookeeper warning ziggy the zebra

Slide 7: The zookeeper had an idea.
Image: A light bulb over the zookeeper's head

Slide 8: Ziggy had a zebra crossing
Image: Ziggy using the zebra crossing to cross the road, while cars wait on.  


Anushyam

[KL]

Wonderful work, all!! Man, I think this is going to be a very hard contest to judge!!

Koala Girl, you could almost turn that into a Little Reader download already! Why don't you make it one and let us all (and our kids) enjoy it too?

[koala girl]

Thank you!  I can go ahead and download it but I don't have my microphone up and running yet.  I can download it without me reading it or I can try to get my microphone running.  Thanks for the encouragement though!

I love the other stories too!  I can't wait to see more.  My DD and I are having so much fun together here already.  My older kids even get on Brillbaby when I'm not watching just for the fun of it!

[Bebita]

Auntie Jane and the cake
Slide 1: Auntie Jane wants to make a cake. She asks her animals, "Who would like to help?"
Image: Auntie Jane in front of a farm house, some baking utensils in her hands.

Slide 2: "Not me," said the pig. (sound of a pig)
"Not me," said the cow. (sound of a cow)
"Not me, said the hen. (sound of a hen)
We are too busy to help you.
Image: Show the animals talking with auntie.

Slide 3: Auntie Jane asks her children, "Who would like to help?"
Image: Show the auntie talking to children scattered around the yard.

Slide 4: "I will," said Jenny.
"I will," said Pete.
"I will," said Lily.
We are happy to help you!
Image: Show happy children running toward the house.

Slide 5: They have a lot of fun and they make a yummy cake.
Image: Show the kitchen, children and auntie dusty and dirty from baking and a big cake.

Slide 6: Auntie Jane said, "Who would like to help me to eat the cake?"
Image: Show the auntie standing in front of the house with the cake in her hands.

Slide 7: "I will," said the pig. (sound of a pig)
"I will," said the cow. (sound of a cow)
"I will," said the hen. (sound of a hen)
We all have time to eat.
Image: The auntie still standing in front of her house surrounded by the happy animals, eager to eat the cake.

Slide 8: "Oh no," said auntie Jane, "you do not deserve a piece. You did not help."
Image: Show the auntie hiding the cake behind her and motioning 'no' to the animals.

Slide 9: Auntie Jane invited the children to have some cake.
Image: Show the auntie motioning to the children to come and eat.
Slide 10: The animals were very sad.
Image: Show the animals' sad faces.

Slide 11: "I'm sorry," said the pig. (sound of a pig)
"I'm sorry," said the cow. (sound of a cow)
"I'm sorry," said the hen. (sound of a hen)
Next time we will help you!
Image: Shows the animals sadly tugging at auntie's skirt.

Slide 12: Auntie Jane said, "I see you are sorry, so because I love you, you can have some cake too."
Image: Auntie Jane is cutting the cake.

Slide 13: Everyone was happy, the cake was very good. (MMMMMMMmmmmmm sound)
And next time when asked for help the animals will say:
Image: Shows everyone eating and enjoying the cake.

Slide 14: "I will," says the pig. (sound of a pig)
"I will," says the cow. (sound of a cow)
"I will," says the hen. (sound of a hen)
We are very happy to help you!
Image: Shows everyone together happy and waving to the reader.

[Bystre deti]

I uploaded Little Reader category:
Children's Story - Rainy Day Picnic - http://forum.brillkids.com/downloads/?sa=view;id=788
(From Longman Series - English for Me! - I highly recommend it as early reading). 

Slide 1
"Let's go on a picnic tomorrow," said Mrs. Lee. "Yes! Great!" shouted the boys and girls.
Picture: Picture of Mrs. Lee with a basket ready for a picnic.

Slide 2
The next day the children came to school ready to go on a picnic.
Picture: The children coming to school ready to go on a picnic

Slide 3
But by lunchtime the clouds were gray. It got very windy.Picture: Children looking out the window to gray windy sky.

Slide 4
The sky was dark. And it got darker and darker untill...Picture: The sky is getting darker.

Slide 5
"FLASH!" went the lightning.
Picture: Flash of the lightning.

Slide 6
"BOOM!" went the thunder.
Picture: Boom of the thunder.

Slide 7
"PLOP! PLOP! PLOP!" went the rain.
Picture: Plopping of the rain.

Slide 8
"Now we can't have our picnic." "Oh no!" cried the children. But Nora was thinking.
Picture: Children looking at the raining and Nora thinking.

Slide 9
Nora whispered something into Mrs. Lee's ear. "Good idea, Nora!"
Picture: Nora whispering something into Mrs. Lee's ear.

Slide 10
The children moved their chairs.
Picture: Children moving their chairs.

Slide 11
They moved their tables. The children helped Mrs. Lee put the big blanket on the floor.
Picture: Children moving their tables and helping Mrs. Lee put the big blanket on the floor.

Slide 12
"Look! Now we can have our picnic!" said Mrs. Lee. The children laughed as the rain splashed on the windows.
Picture: Children and teacher having picnic on the floor in the classroom.

[nhockaday]

PLAYTIME
by NHOCKADAY
http://forum.brillkids.com/downloads/?sa=view;id=794

Slide one: Emily likes to swim.
(a girl swimming)

Slide two: Josh likes to sing.
(a boy singing)
 
Slide three: Michael likes to jump,
(a boy jumping)

Slide four: and Amy likes to swing.
(a girl swinging)

Slide five: John likes to spin.
(a boy spinning)

Slide six: Jenny likes to hide.
(a girl hiding behind something)

Slide seven: David likes to run,
(a boy running)

Slide eight: and Mary likes to slide.
(a girl sliding down a slide)

Slide nine: All of these children love to play.
(small pics of all the children doing their favorite activities)

Slide ten: What would you like to do today?
(all of the action words listed around the page in different fonts, sizes, and colors)

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